So I have started working on ‘Red Rose’ the novel! And by started working I mean I wrote down a list of scenes I want in the story and I am trying to get the guts to show it to my mom to see what she thinks. I also asked my roommates what they thought. I mean I really don’t want to waste my time on something that I know will be a dud.
But the reason I’m writing this is because I had a few questions for all of you:
I’m writing this because of you guys I want to know:
What do you want to see in the novel?
Is there anything that didn’t make it into Red Rose that you would like to see in the novel?
Anything you think I should take out?
Also in case your all wondering, yes I’m still working on “A Tall Tower” and even planning out the next story. There is just so much I have to get done that I am rather neglecting the poor story.
Here are my two cents:
ReplyDeleteI think all of your scenes in Red Rose worked and are necessary for the characters' arcs and the development of their relationships. My fave were the sick scenes and the final scenes ^^, but that's just me. If you aren't planning to turn A Tall Tower into a novel as well, you may want to include a kiss scene at the end of this one; or, maybe not. It was kind of nice to /not/ know how it was going to end, and the necklace was an excellent surprise. And more IC of Seto (btw, what's his name going to be now?). So, maybe keep the kiss out. Idk, your call on that.
Now, some general advice (which you probably already know and are planning on, but humor me :)):
You're probably going to want descrips of the building, the characters, etc. now that your readers don't rely on past knowledge. As such you'll also have to give new backstory to your characters, which (of course) you should always feed in small bits to readers (which you do anyway). Your opening scene with Emi's internal monologue might be better conveyed entirely through dialogue with the Seto character, interspersed with some flashbacks to that night.
Overall, I think the original fanfic has provided you with the frame, and now you just have to flesh it out for an entire novel
A general grammatical nitpick- you mention "blue orbs" and "the blonde-haired girl"- a /lot/. Sorry, but that just...bothers me. It's kind of purple prose, lol.
OMG, I'm so sorry for just going on like that! XD! And I'm pretty sure you already knew everything already, but sometimes I wish when I first started writing people had given me the same advice that they just took for granted.
ANYWAY-
Good luck- I know it'll be great! And don't worry about telling your mom. Mine was cool when I told her I wanted to start one. Just don't tell her when she's half asleep, lol...
Happy writing,
Shirracco/SilverDragonWolf/whatever